Thursday, 17 March 2016

          One of my friends is strongly addicted to games and his phone. He even spent the night playing game and arrived late for school. He couldn’t concentrate in school because he was tired. After a few nights of playing games, he had to sleep the whole school day. The teachers called his parents to stop his bad habit. Together they were forced to seek help for him. Such addiction is common place in Korea. Game or phone addiction is a problem that most teenagers have and this problem will lead teenagers to ruin their life.
The problem begins with parents not monitoring children’s phones. Most Korean parents are busy working. Even moms who usually take care of their child, works. It is because they need to pay for their children’s academies. The working moms usually send their children to academies thinking it will help them. Despite the effort of their parents, most children do not control themselves with their phones. If no one watches or monitors them in academies, they also use their phone in classes. I have seen several of my friends on their phones the whole class.
The solution to this problem is making an app to control the children’s use of phones. The parents will be able to monitor the children’s activity by the app. That way, the moms can call or warn their children if they are doing something inappropriate and wrong. Some people might think that this solution takes away people’s privacy; however, I believe that this is the only solution to decrease the number of teenagers who are addicted to games or phones.
Some may say that playing games will reduce children’s stress from studying. However, there are healthier ways to relieve stress such as exercising or reading a book. Moreover, I believe that even playing games will relieve student’s mental stress, it will not relieve their physical stress.
Parents should monitor children’s phone all the time. They need to check and control what their children are doing with their phones. Do you know what your children are doing right now? If you have a son or daughter with a phone, you really need to monitor your child’s use of that phone.
                                                                        By Ashley Min


1 comment:

  1. You did well here. You have all the parts to the persuasive essay - problem, solution, the anti-argument and a good closing. well done!

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